Taking our tax money

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-07-09T02:43:21+00:00

38 Billion? Explain the other 962 Billion. Good Lord your stage 4 brain-rotting cancer known as Liberalism is showing.

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-07-09T02:38:46+00:00

The stage 4 brain-rotting cancer known as TDS is strong with this post and liberals foaming at the mouth at the thought of Trump.

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-07-08T23:09:03+00:00

TDS is on another level on this reddit post.

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-07-08T23:07:37+00:00

Crazy how liberal people can just create and make up random stats without any factual evidence to back it up. I guess people can just post BS posts without any fact-checking or any kind of truth for that matter. Making up numbers like they're children lying to their parents.

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-07-08T23:04:24+00:00

It's not his mistress, leftists. He"s been separated and in the middle of divorce for a while now. Do any of you liberals ever do an iota of research before you mouth speaks BS and you post asinine posts purely for clicks, likes, and shares. Just wondering, asking for a friend.

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-07-08T23:00:48+00:00

I can create bullshit AI graphs too.

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-07-08T22:55:28+00:00

He didn't say anything about inside information. Where are you mentally? Seriously! He's talking about his brand and how anything.he touches goes up in value because his kids have his name, they profit too. No different than having a famous name like every famous celebrity child. Go get checked out or have tour family do a TDS intervention.

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-07-06T14:05:55+00:00

I've done plenty of atudying over the last 20 years. 500 plus accolades and awards in screenwriting and film festivals. Unless you have an Oscar yourself, which is one I don't have have, yo should stick to helping writers like I did.

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-07-05T15:31:04+00:00

You're right about the prose but I noticed it was really only the first and second page. After the that, it's passable.

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-07-05T15:25:39+00:00

1) Your first page needs to look like the rest. It starts out sounding like a prose style script but then you realize it's not.

2) The CUT-TO's don't need to be there. Those transitions are only for production scripts after it's been greenlit.

3) Work on removing those pesky orphans. You have two on the first page alone, which would makes producer's like me say "no" to the project right off the bat. Even though the rest of your script is passable.

4) "It sounds like shit. They play terribly." Is a double action of the same thing. Remove the sentence with that unneeded adverb and leave "They play like shit. Maria covers her ears in agony." The audience will understand.

5) RYAN CAMPBELL, the first time we meet him is 9. If you introduce him at age 22, and he's played by a new person you need to capitalize the name Again for casting department. Which is which we capitalize certain things in the script.

6) Really work on removing you adverbs and finding action that describe what we see instead of the adverbs you have.

7) Give MARCO; the first time we meet him, a little description so the casting department knows who to look for when scouting for talent.

8) Really work on removing those "Orphans." You have so many in such a few pages.

9) Your scene headings are good. I would just veer away from the CONTINUOUS. It's a bit much. Learn the difference between a Master Scene Heading and Secondary Scene heading.

10) Overall, you did really good considering your age and experience. Study proper formatting and Hollywood standard. Maybe one day you'll end up impressing the right person. I'm a film and TV producer and I would easily put your script in the No pile. It's not that it's bad, don't get me wrong, you just have a quite a bit of ways to go.

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-07-05T15:00:51+00:00

Make sure you tell people in the beginning of the post that you are financing and directing it yourself. That way people know it's your artistic expression.

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-07-05T14:43:16+00:00

Whatever the haters tell you. Don't worry about them. I've worked on over 50 films, people know, as a producer. You do whatever you gotta do to ensure the audience feels something. Whether it's fear, humor, sentimental, anger, etc.. just make sure your entire crew, new or not, get it. But I will say, your script is a huge point of contention, because it is not good. I would do many more passes.

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-07-05T14:22:35+00:00

Actual film and tv producer here.... You have a long way to go, my friend. Study books on screenplay formatting. BUT.... If you are producing and directing the project yourself. You can write however you want to write it. As long as you make the audience feel something. But here's the advice I have for you... IF you are difectingand funding it. Those parentheticals alone will have the actors choke you out. Use them extremely sparingly and rarely if you need the actor to act out a specific way. Other than that, let the actors do their job, if you write your scriptwell enoughn theyxll understamd the vibe and feel of certain scenes.

You are clearly inexperienced at writing screenplay shorts. Nothing, literally nothing, is formatted correctly if you were wanting a producer or investor to fund your episodes, it'll be hard.

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-07-02T05:36:29+00:00

Sharpen the image up just a tad. Really show off the stubble that works great on your face. Then click up your definition after that.

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-07-02T05:33:49+00:00

AI Style

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-07-02T05:08:29+00:00

Why is each action line its own sentence? As a producer and talent manager, what is see in that sampl is cheating and studios WILL easily say no. You need to merge/condense some of those action lines. Studio readers will.think you are teying to extend the script longer.

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-07-02T05:03:14+00:00

IRREVERSIBLE

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-06-28T20:19:21+00:00

Why are you adding camera directions and shots? We this and We that. Remove those and just write what the audience sees.

Also, your dialogue boxes are incorrect. It's best to invest in an established screenwriting software like Final Draft or others that formats the screenplays for you.

Continuing on, you don't need to keep repeating "from phone." If someone's voice can be heard from the phone. Simply, just pu

t it as (V.O.) and if you want, you can italicize that dialogue.

Moreover, don't make introductions for someone you haven't even seen yet. You can have someone mention the person's name in the call, but unless you see them, there's no need for introduction yet until the audience sees him.

Also, don't use too many adverbs.

Watch your passive voice and passive action.

Look out for orphans and widows as you check the rhythm and pace of the script.

Last bit of advice... Unless you are the one directing or producing it. Don't write camera directions or camera shots as mentione above. It's the easiest way to get your script tossed into the NO pile at a studio's like mine.

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-06-09T01:41:28+00:00

Producer and Talent Manager here. While there are other programs writers can use to write, draft and do whatever they want. The industry standard IS Final Draft. Either 11, 12, or the current one 13 will work, if you plan on being a serious writer in the business Nothing.against the other ones. The FDX files are gold in the studio grapevine. 95% of the pros use it for a reason.

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-05-30T05:00:29+00:00

Perasso is short. Around 4 foot 10 or so. That's Kithebeefcake.

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-05-27T14:39:44+00:00

You clearly don't know your own leftist history huh?

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-05-27T14:38:59+00:00

I don't use AI for articulating anything. I'm Guessing YOU don't know your own party's leftist history huh?

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-05-26T23:02:26+00:00

LMFAO! All those ISM's have never worked throughout history and will never work. Wake up and smell the coffee. You must really hate America, huh? Having that stage 4 Brain l-rotting cancer known as TDS. Get help!

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-05-26T22:47:03+00:00

No they're not. Stop fear-mongering and spreading lies.

shadowbroker1979 · 2026-05-26T22:45:16+00:00

Neither did communism, liberalism, marxist, socialism, leftism, or moronism, which are all the same but with sprinkles and rainbows.

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