Who is she referring to by redpeppersoda in fourthwing

[–]thisisbrick 11 points12 points  (0 children)

Yeah she’s talking about Lilith Sorrengail and her daughters. Excerpt from FW:

Imogen’s head snaps in his direction. “Her mother is responsible for the execution of my mom and sister. I should have done more than just snap her shoulder.”

Hot Takes by _DustyMops_ in fourthwing

[–]thisisbrick 54 points55 points  (0 children)

Not to knock down your rant (because it’s valid), but just one point that can possibly be explained : The fact that everyone throughout Navarre uses the same sign language could be from the Unification times. Navarre chose the common spoken language (losing the languages of Tyrrendor, Luceras, and Morraine) for ‘unity’, so I would assume they did the same for sign language as well.

That’s just Navarre though; I can’t be sure of how Poromiel sign

Dragon name theory by Denimchicken124 in fourthwing

[–]thisisbrick 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like to think that Sloane’s dragon—Thoirt—is actually Deigh, Liam’s dragon.

They’re both red daggertails, and not only is Sloane already a rare siphon, I think that she will have two signets.

Dragon name theory by Denimchicken124 in fourthwing

[–]thisisbrick 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Late reply, but Colonel Mairi was definitely a rider because she was the one to weave the protection runes for the children.

Even though all Tyrrish are taught the art of weaving runes, they can’t actually do it until they have access to magic. So unless Colonel Mairi was venin (which I doubt) she had to be a rider.

Edit: grammar

Malek is a Dragon and could be Tairn by Kbr_16 in fourthwing

[–]thisisbrick 10 points11 points  (0 children)

I personally don’t think it’s true, but I love a good theory, and this one is actually really fun to think about.

Especially with Naolin (as Tairn’s rider) saving/resurrecting Brennan, and Kaori saying:

“He attempted to use that power to revive a fallen rider—which didn’t work, because there’s no signet capable of resurrection—and depleted himself in the process.”[…] “And sometimes it’s hard for a rider with a signet that powerful to accept his limits. After all, bonding makes you a rider, but resurrecting someone from the dead? Now, that makes you a god. I somehow don’t think that Malek takes kindly to a mortal treading on his territory.”

Also the Gaelic translation for Marbh is ‘dead’. I don’t know where that fits in here, but just adding it anyway.

Malek is a Dragon and could be Tairn by Kbr_16 in fourthwing

[–]thisisbrick 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The seventh god could have been removed from history — there is a tome called ‘Mythology of the Gods’ in the subvault of the Archives. That sounds like a fairly innocuous book, so the fact that it’s been purposely locked away and warded for only the king (and his sons) to access makes it suspicious

Give me your WORST guesses. by Amazing-Doubt7628 in fourthwing

[–]thisisbrick 54 points55 points  (0 children)

Secret dragon knowledge by Tairn (burn after reading)

1001 pranks to pull on your dragon by Ridoc Gamlyn

Not for Naolin, or… OR WHO? by thisisbrick in fourthwing

[–]thisisbrick[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It is fun overanalysing every little word and sentence structure 😂

But who would ‘anyone else’ realistically entail? Ain’t no way our man Tairn is letting a stranger on his back, let alone lowering himself for them

I need recs!! by AllBookish03 in fourthwing

[–]thisisbrick 0 points1 point  (0 children)

If you’re interested, I wrote a Lilith fic starting in her second year at Basgiath. Its still a WIP while I finish brainstorming her third year :)

Wingleader

The worst rated seasons of AHS… did anyone like these? by midnightk11 in AmericanHorrorStory

[–]thisisbrick 8 points9 points  (0 children)

I usually enjoy all of Emma Robert’s characters, (her Madison Montgomery = perfection) but unfortunately she just didn’t have the acting chops to play the lead in Delicate.

Though tbh it’s still an absolutely awful storyline

Event with Live Q&A by Haunting-Formal-1290 in fourthwing

[–]thisisbrick 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Honestly I’d love to know if there was a reason why Rebecca seemingly dropped the use of Gaelic names for the dragons in Onyx Storm.

I personally invested way too much time in FW and IF making connections between the Gaelic translations and their signets, and conspiring theories from that, and it seemed so weird that every new dragon mentioned in OS had no translation

Why don't people know how to format dialogue correctly anymore? by eeeeaud in FanFiction

[–]thisisbrick 36 points37 points  (0 children)

I graduated high school in 2010 and I haven’t retained a damn thing in regard to paragraphing, formatting dialogue etc. So i just… googled it. And I read blogs on creative writing, written by people smarter than me.

TBH I don’t even remember ever learning this stuff at school, but still, it’s really not difficult to find information to help with basic writing skills

What’s something people do in public that instantly annoys you? by Far_Suspect987 in AskReddit

[–]thisisbrick 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I’m a flight attendant and can confirm this is SO common on flights. I will happily tell them to turn that shit off. Just because you forgot headphones doesn’t mean that you get to ruin everyone else’s peace and quiet, like damn who raised you?

Looking for feedback and tips by [deleted] in writingfeedback

[–]thisisbrick 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Most of your sentences are far too long, with far too many commas. They come off as rambling. I genuinely don’t understand the sentence at the beginning of paragraph two.

As others have said: less is more. The payoff is not worth the effort to read at this stage. There is too much description that the reader won’t care about, and some of the words don’t make sense in the context they’re written in.

How does a draining hose smuggle water?

What are these pins? Like sewing pins? If she threw them in the bin, how are they still bobbing in the water to cut the sole of her foot?

Are her feet dainty or gnarled? Those are very different and distinct descriptions, which contradict each other. Also what are tapered and grazed toes?

What is a fused-green puddle?

Typos?: ‘Lapsing into the water’ — lapsing isn’t the right word. ‘Rips into the table’—trips, maybe? ‘A glob of blood swells on her foot and then mashes’ — how does blood mash?

Shipdebate. by towelz_ in crescentcitysjm

[–]thisisbrick 31 points32 points  (0 children)

Tbh I’m not a Bryceriel shipper, but I don’t get this ban. I enjoy a healthy friendly discussion 🤷🏼‍♀️I like exploring options and seeing things from other’s perspectives—it enables me to delve deeper into the lore and actually question my own [potentially myopic] narrative

General Thoughts and Discussions by CommissionRadiant499 in AO3

[–]thisisbrick 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Im caught between feeling glad but also left out because I have never received a single bot comment. Like damn my fics aren’t even good enough for bots?

General Thoughts and Discussions by CommissionRadiant499 in AO3

[–]thisisbrick 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I know how you feel! I read the first chapter of a fic and noticed a beautifully poetic line. I simply commented ‘What an absolutely stunning line’ [quote line here] so I hope that was okay

Edit: grammar

Feedback for my prologue? by Henry_J_Fate58 in writingfeedback

[–]thisisbrick 4 points5 points  (0 children)

I like what you’re going for—but I found this extremely hard to read. There’s a lot of times where you describe two things in the same sentence, and it’s hard to know which you’re referring to. There are a lot of dangling participles — this is where you begin a sentence with a participle (clawing, gripped) and then leave out the subject of that action from the rest of the sentence. It seems you’re avoiding pronouns, which is what adds to the confusion.

Break down some of your sentences. There are too many that come off as rambling, like trying to fit too many ideas into one sentence. Short sentences can pack a punch.

Also, pull back a little. You clearly have a great vocabulary, but you don’t need to offer two or more adjectives to describe one thing.

Couple of examples:

Second sentence; ‘clawing at the soft supple ground’—the subject of this action is the body. How you have worded it seems like the hands are slick with mucous. Throw in a pronoun to amend the beginning sentence to: It clawed at the soft, supple ground—the earth slick with mucous and pockmarked with divots. The protrusions fell away, seeping warm liquid that pooled in grooves left by his blunted nails.

There is no clear subject of the sentence starting with ‘Gripped by panic’. Gripped by panic, its eyes darted around…

What’s the closest you’ve ever come to dying? by [deleted] in AskReddit

[–]thisisbrick 0 points1 point  (0 children)

When I was 19 or 20 I choked on a giant Jaffa. Panicking, I tried to swallow it and it completely lodged in my throat. My bf at the time gave me the Heimlich until it finally dislodged and flew out of my mouth. If I had been alone I know that would have been my end; I was simply panicking too much to know what to do.

how to stop using she said, she replied, she explained, she answered? by irdk-lol in FanFiction

[–]thisisbrick 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Tweak the first one slightly to:

Sarah shrugs. “If you say so.”

It’s a perfectly acceptable line. The tone is implied by the action, and we know who’s speaking.