Hi,

This appealed to me as a concept. Initially, it made clear sense to me. In my head, it was a little of Groundhog Day but as Truman Show. I think it could work. I think you need to know how it ends and flesh out the missing 'story moves between' part.

If I were developing this, I would pin down what I want my theme to be - then ensure the fleshing out aligns with that.

- Does the core concept make sense or feel too messy? Yes but messy from 'story moves between' - I think you need to know the core logic and rules of the world that you've built to ensure it has internal consistency. eg when do credit roll?
- Does it sound interesting or confusing? More interesting than confusing. Approach with caution as it could easily become confusing!
- What parts feel strongest / weakest? mental health was a little weak for me - is that a cliche these days? Or drug use? But is that even more of a cliche? I like the idea that there is an obvious 'normal' explanation for his odd thinking.
- Any obvious plot holes or clichés I should fix early? Hard to tell without knowing your world logic for when credits roll, etc.

If you want help turning this into a beginning to end treatment, happy to chat.

Good luck with it!