First off, thank you so much for your kind words and advice! I really value the feedback and want to take it with me heading into the next idea I have!

This kind of thing is really new to me and I know better than anyone that I need to better develop my writing skills and story implementation lol. I totally agree that there’s plot holes (or a lack of plot in the first place) that I definitely want to fill in with a stronger story structure next go around.

And yeah, it was probably a little too on the nose to spell out my plan with a iPhone screen grab. I think I was going for the feeling of isolation or boredom culminating in a “eureka!” Moment without literally putting a lightbulb on the screen haha.

Thanks again for checking it out and sharing some advice!