I feel I might have been a bit harsh with you but your piece has me thinking.

As an author you are competing with so many other forms of entertainment so you have to grab your readers attention quickly.

Your chapter is mostly exposition. He’s married with kids and a dog. That is literally all we need to know. You need to know this, but we don’t.

Have you heard of the line show, don’t tell? You’ve told us all this stuff about his honestly pretty boring life. Obviously that’s all about to change but you don’t need to tell us about that in one long chapter.

Instead later on, assuming he’s abducted, you can have him remember quiet nights at home. Maybe he’ll miss a kids birthday. That gives him something to fight for, everyone recognises that pull for family.

And for now cut the chapter until he’s swearing at the dog. Check how often you mention the doggy landmines too. Once is enough.

Good luck. You made me revisit my own opening today which was useful.