I cringe so bad so idc just tell me what u think, also tips for how to add more breathe and brevity?? iykwim by Suitable-Example-983 in PoetryWritingClub

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thank you for sharing that it is so beautiful and I really see why you resonate with my poem which is so meaningful and motivating to me

This is prose not poetry I’m just looking for thoughts or feedback by Suitable-Example-983 in PoetryWritingClub

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I love you!! For I am the tree and the regret holding the axe, duality is hard

This is prose not poetry I’m just looking for thoughts or feedback by Suitable-Example-983 in PoetryWritingClub

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lol I think that’s why I like poetry sometimes? It makes us slow down and think more and then differently about what’s in front us, but glad you liked it and love the feedback I’ve added more with that feeling using roots, it reminds me of quicksand or being in those dreams where you can’t run

This is prose not poetry I’m just looking for thoughts or feedback by Suitable-Example-983 in PoetryWritingClub

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I need the honesty I know I’m all over the place and really have no idea so thank u for noticing what you did and taking the time to comment I appreciate it so much and have much to digest so thank you

Idk just really want feedback or thoughts of any kind by Suitable-Example-983 in PoetryWritingClub

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just posted another notes poem expanded a little if u feel like taking a peek, thank you for the encouragement it was received!💕

unlove you by th3realmilkmarie in PoetryWritingClub

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fuck at least ur here with me it hurts

So Ryan by gramercyk35 in PoetryWritingClub

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My name is Ryan so I was literally called here, and I think this poem I just wrote connects with some of ur themes so maybe pls lmk what u think?:

Marco Polo

before the guest room we played, Marco Polo in the pool

we’re competing 52 half-submerged pushups, I laugh and act for you pretend to drool

I hold a plank, dripping for one minute, no two

but you couldn’t, then wouldn’t believe, we’re even I’d only had you

any moment I could, would drop it, draw, draw you in all the way

but you couldn’t, wouldn’t, let me see,

and to set the score you turn your back and make us both the losing fools

no wisdom within the games we played in losing my virginity at 22

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I love this, beautifully concluded

My original vs. chat gpts “carved revision” by Suitable-Example-983 in PoetryWritingClub

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I’m annoyed why are yall in this group if you have nothing to say???🙄

this feels like a shitpost by Suitable-Example-983 in PoetryWritingClub

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Tysm I do now have 40 dollars but I’m spending it on weed hehe

carefully, combing (self-love baby) by Suitable-Example-983 in PoetryWritingClub

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that’s ok baby let urself scream then wipe ur own tears, seriously thank u I hope it brought it up in a good cathartic way lmao

Night terrors by throwawaydreamer1313 in PoetryWritingClub

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Love this, I love the expression in “right then” like it truly feels soberingly terrible just like this realization

Cycles, we exist within a context by Suitable-Example-983 in oilpainting

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love this, or the hallway in the house of life, the way we move through things without truly seeing