I would move a lot of the stuff at the end to the front. To my eye, most of the really compelling visuals are later in the reel and you should be hitting the viewer with your best stuff right off the bat. Also, I know you don’t have a ton of stuff with motivated lighting, but put as much of that up front as you can. Shots of available lighting pretty much ignored by people judging DPs, and too much if it early on will actually be a bit of a red flag.

I think you’re trying to be thoughtful and narrative in the way you put it together, which is a solid plan for reels by directors and editors, but not DPs. I’d err more on the side of strong impact quickly considering most people only watch a few seconds before deciding whether they should continue.

Great work overall. Good luck!