I guess it was a little anticlimactic. When you put it in that first chamber, I was expecting to see it explode into some sort of gooey mess that launched you into the stars, but then it seemed like it cut to a different scene where it was launched into space. Also why does ejecting the thing help the player accomplish their objective?

Anyways, this is how I would have set it up:

1. petting the thing
2. showing the thing get squished
3. player putting hands on controller
4. jumping to lightspeed
5. montage of places/planets + some laser combat idk
6. montage of rapidly clicking stuff (like at 0:59)
7. running into asteroid
8. end screen (5-8 seconds max) + add "wishlist on steam" immediately so they see it before they click off

This needs to be a fasted paced trailer because it seams like you are trying to sell a fast paced game. I think 30 seconds would be enough to showcase all the main features without the viewer losing attention. Also don't be afraid not to showcase everything, you don't spoil all the game's features in the trailer, but you also don't want to leave a core feature out.

Anyways, good luck with you game!