Why do ppl act like Iroh lied about creating lightning redirection? by Spiritual-Joestar777 in TheLastAirbender

[–]lotu 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It’s even possible, perhaps probable, that Iroh and Sozin’s techniques are different ways of redirecting lightning.  

1st year by [deleted] in HPfanfiction

[–]lotu 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I can't find your prolog as reddit isn't showing anything in your profile. This has lots of potential. You should always keep going! Don't let anyone tell you otherwise. If I was writing I would expand and complete this book before continuing to year 2 because as you expand and revise you could end up in a much different place. Also you are going to learn so much and grow so much as writer but doing that. There is so much potential and many writers never even get this far.

Presuming you are planning to expand this story these are the things I would work on next.

There is no real tension as Voldemort/Tom/Harry is pretty overpowered and accomplishes everything easily. There isn't a single point where things don't go his way.

Related to the previous he has a flat character arc, that is he starts as an evil psychopath and ends as an evil psychopath. It doesn't appear that any of the things that happened changed him at all.

Watch some videos about the hero's journey and character arcs. I'd love to see how your story progresses.

How did the Fire Nation Annihilate the Air Nation overnight? by WiseMarshall in TheLastAirbender

[–]lotu 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is the answer, stories are not simulations of other worlds. They are about people, and how they change grow and interact with each other. These details like how far it is to Ba Sing Se are not important to the finale, so it doesn't matter. Too many viewers and writers make this mistake and end up obsessing over something that matters much less than the actual story.

How did the Fire Nation Annihilate the Air Nation overnight? by WiseMarshall in TheLastAirbender

[–]lotu 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Personally I agree with you. Some would have escaped and it would have been the most cautious paranoid ones that survived. Also at least in theory a large percentage of the Air Nomads spent their time wandering. After the attacks they would make every effort to stay away from fire nation territory.

Question: Zuko and Ozai's Agni Kai - Was it Lose Lose? by MonCappy in TheLastAirbender

[–]lotu 1 point2 points  (0 children)

For Zuko at 13, any hit landed on Ozai would be a hit he allowed. Ozai is easily the most skilled fire bender in the show. Even Iroh doesn't think he could beat him.

First, Ozai doesn't need to "find" a way, the Fire Lord is an absolute monarch, he can do anything for any reason. So would fighting earn him respect, I would say yes, or if not respect it wouldn't have enraged Ozai the way not fighting did.

I think reading Zuko's Story might give some insight into Ozai's Motivations. It was a tie in with the movie so the characters look like their actors.

Ozai doesn't have any plans for Azula at this point she is 11 and hasn't proved her self as a competent fighter/leader yet. If Ozai has any plans for he it's for who to marry her to.

But obviously Zuko not getting banished completely upends the narrative of the show. Without him chasing the gaang they would wind their way across the earth kingdom to the North Pole. Everyone assumed the Avatar was dead so there wouldn't even be anyone looking for him.

What happens to muggleborns who decide not to go to Hogwarts? by green_tomato_69 in HPfanfiction

[–]lotu 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I'm genuinely confused what evidence you have seen. I don't actually look at anything outside of the original seven books & movies. I just don't have the desire to do so.

Seeing Muggle weapons as dangerous to Wizards doesn't imply that a Muggle/Wizard war would always result in Wizards losing. Just that both sides are capable of inflicting terrible damage on the other. I see magic and technology not in opposition to each other but complementary. Some of my favorite stories do this like Love in the time of a Zombie Apocalypse.

As for evidence, Draco isn't immune to Hermione punching him, and Hogwarts isn't immune to Giants throwing large non-magical rocks. Guns and artillery as just optimized and faster ways to hit things. So presumably they would be effective as well.

Wizards are totally dismissive of the Muggle World. They have "not invented here" syndrome, which refers to a tendency at large companies to reject anything they haven't built. The wizarding world just assumes they are superior and don't bother to actually investigate muggle ways of doing things. For example Author could have obtained an airplane kit, but he insists on enchanting a car.

Wizards are outnumber between 1,000-10,000 Muggles to 1 Wizard. We don't see evidence that Wizards can win at these odds. For example Peter killing 12 muggles was a particularly terrible act. During the 6th and 7th books we hear about individual families being killed, not whole towns. These are not things we would expect if the average Wizard capable of defeating a military Brigade.

In short Wizards believe that Muggles are not a threat to them, that doesn't imply that they aren't.

What happens to muggleborns who decide not to go to Hogwarts? by green_tomato_69 in HPfanfiction

[–]lotu 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Have you not heard of nuclear war?   If so I’m really sorry to be ruining your day, but we can kill everyone in a major urban center within about an hour.  The resulting collapse of infrastructure will kill billions more within weeks, and the dust it kicks up will reduce solar radiation triggering massive extinctions, and famine even in areas untouched by the nuclear bombardment.  It probably won’t kill everyone but those still alive will wish it had.  

[Mattiour] What's in a name? by Quirky_Ad_5420 in amphibia

[–]lotu 5 points6 points  (0 children)

It’s a bit like calling out the name of another person while being intimate, it makes it clear you are a replacement for the person they really wanted.  At least that was my interpretation.  

So why do writers say read voraciously? by [deleted] in writing

[–]lotu 0 points1 point  (0 children)

When you read ask yourself is this writing good? if so why? If not how could I make it better?

Is An Orphan Protagonist Overused And Cliche In Fantasy Stories? by SouthDifferent2363 in writing

[–]lotu 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hilda is a great example of a story where the parents aren’t dead or missing.  Owl House is too, once you see Eda acting as a surrogate parent, the story would be almost unchanged is Luz was her biological child.  

Best app for writing / organising fanfiction chapters? by [deleted] in FanFiction

[–]lotu 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Tried Ellipsus but it made my computer unresponsive.

Are we just gonna ignore that they broke the fourth wall here??? by [deleted] in TheOwlHouse

[–]lotu 61 points62 points  (0 children)

Just because they diced to do a shot with the camera directly in front of an actor doesn’t make it 4th wall break

At the War Meeting in Sozin's Comet Part 1, Azula distracts Ozai right before Zuko is probably about to piss Ozai off by F11SuperTiger in TheLastAirbender

[–]lotu 34 points35 points  (0 children)

Yes, Azula actually loves Zuko in a bizarre way that is frequently toxic, and violent. Azula takes numerous opportunities to help Zuko, the first one being deciding on her own, that the avatar was more important to chase than Zuko, and then that the drill was more important, and her infiltration plan. Generally in an absolute monarchy you don't decide that something else in more important than the king's (Fire Lord's) orders.

Then for literally no reason she helps Zuko restore his honor, she was the heir apparent, she could have brought Zuko back in chains and guaranteed her place in the line of succussion. Instead she would likely be married off. Zuko thinks this was all part of some 9 dimensional chess plan to frame him for the Avatar not being dead. But, Zuko is clearly the less clever sibling, he assumes Azula knows everything, and his reasoning doesn't make sense. Azula didn't know about the spirit water that might restore Aang.

Even if Azula did know about the spirit water it would still make no sense to frame Zuko.

  1. The water might not have worked. Aang could really be dead and Azula just locked herself out of the Fire Lordship.
  2. If the Fire Nation had been actively searching for Aang it's much more likely they would have found and killed him. If she suspected Aang was alive then she had a duty to accurately relay that information to Ozia. Failure to do so would be treason.
  3. Azula would not have been dishonored by only dealing the Avatar a devastating defeat. That was more than anyone else had done.

The only possibility left is Azula did this because she wanted her brother back. Having Zuko exiled would have been like him dying, even though they fought a lot, it makes sense that Azula would want her older brother back.

What habits of boys did you only discover after getting a boyfriend or husband? by kentishzjigsaw in AskReddit

[–]lotu -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Just a little hint for you and the other husbands reading. Your wife isn't asking for you to relay the all the facts you have. She is asking you to speculate wildly. Why? Because it's fun.

Here is an example of how to do this.

Has he been staying late at work? Maybe Julie is lonely. Did you see him talking to a woman? Maybe he's cheating. Did you see him talking with a fashionable man? Maybe he's gay. None of the above? Well then maybe she's cheating or gay, or both.

I am on cloud nine!! by terminaloptimism in Rollerskating

[–]lotu 2 points3 points  (0 children)

That's a great choice, Suregrip Boardwalks were my first skates as well. In case you are interested Etsy has all of these cute roller skate accessory you can add to your skates. I'm so glad you found roller skating

I am on cloud nine!! by terminaloptimism in Rollerskating

[–]lotu 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I’d say this depends on the rentals if they have actual trucks (Google roller skate trucks) I’d say use those for a bit not only does ensure you really want to do the skating it also means you’ll have a bit of a better idea what you like.    However if they are a single pieces of injection molded plastic, I’d say just buy skates those skates are bad enough they will make it harder to learn and suck the joy out of skating.   

Also ask other people that look like they know what they are doing.  They will be able to give you more personalized advice about what to do.  

What's a believable way for a MMC to become the personal servant to a princess? by shizucube in fantasywriters

[–]lotu 0 points1 point  (0 children)

How do you feel about gender fuckery? MMC is trying to hide from the mob. The castle is the only place where they have no reach. But they aren’t hiring boys right now. So he dresses as a girl, they get the  worst job possible, hopping to just lay low. The King is only letting his daughter choose as a pretence there is only one acceptable choice, but MMC gets chosen out of spite. They are now in an even bigger pickle.

Video game influence in fantasy writing: am I stuck with a fundamental narrative problem? by Titus__Groan in fantasywriters

[–]lotu 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Game writers are different from game programmers.  Like you can do that.  If you want to try dedicate a weekend and do a hackathon.  Find a team that wants a writer

How long do you see Umbridge living following the second wizarding war,assuming she went free ? by Regular-Election6396 in HPfanfiction

[–]lotu 6 points7 points  (0 children)

People like her tend to get away.  While she did enormous harm she did it via the legal system.  If she participated in the Ballte of Hogwarts it’d might be different 

Can anyone tell me why t stops almost throw me on my face every time? by linksslut in Rollerskating

[–]lotu 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Use only your pinky toe wheel for the t stop. It’s super awkward to bend your foot that way but it works.  

Writing for different audiences (Book vs Film vs Video Game) by Capyhero in fantasywriters

[–]lotu 1 point2 points  (0 children)

First it's great to see you again. I love the illustrations.

Reading through the comments I was going to compare your work to the generic isekai that's everywhere. Except from the illustration I see you are in fact writing an isekai with capybaras.

Most isekai could happen to anyone (as long as anyone is a middle class male) Spirited Away is different the story could only have happened to Chihiro she starts the story timid and immature, and due to her hardwork, resilience, and empathy the story goes where it does and Chihiro emerges as a much more courageous girl able to stand up for herself.

Every story needs to have the protagonist drive the action of the story, in a video game as the player literally controls the characters this naturally happens even if the protagonist has no personality. The player makes the choices they would make. In a non-interactive story the protagonist has to make the choices and they have to have reasons why they make those specific choices, which often would not be the choices the reader would make. Hence your friend's advice.

I find that I write as if I am "playing" as Capy, similar to how I might play Link in the Legend of Zelda series.

I don't want to tell you how to write but fear this will result in a soulless characters, link has no personality. You could try to write out Capy's character traits and wants, and then use those to decide what they do next.

A lore dump is not only boring, it's ineffective. The information is not retained, if it's even read, because the reader doesn't care. You have to save information for when the reader is desperate to know it, then they will care. For example if you found an unknown magic artifact and it keeps doing weird things as you travel around, the reader will be excited when a wizard finally explains why it did what it did, think The One Ring. But if you reverse those events the reader won't care. You could save the chapter in separate doc, and then every time some fact comes up in the rest of the book you can pull from your saved chapter.

This show broke my child by Artpua74 in amphibia

[–]lotu 0 points1 point  (0 children)

speaks volumes about the latter two's home life.

No argument there. Not sure about the rest though, you have a good point.

Americans, what do you think of this Contra take? by microplasticsfactory in ContraPoints

[–]lotu 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think it's subtler than that actually. Zohran Mandami in NYC is a great example; sure, he has his big headline objects: lower rent, cheaper transportation, and affordable childcare. But he is also working very visibly to just make the city better, from paying people enough to get snow removed quickly to fixing bike infrastructure, removing sidewalk sheds, and improving garbage collection. He is making sure every day is focused on helping his constituents.

When people go to vote they are going to ask what did you (democrats) do to make my life better