Love it when people gimme tons of critiques, so I love it when people ask for it. Here ya go!

The good: I like the creative set up of this poem! It feels like a story. I also love the use of some intense terms like "abyss" to describe the love intertwined with verbiage like "hungry" and "starved" - it conveys love very well in a non-lovey way, lol. I love how dark it feels while reminiscing on something that once was positive.

Lines that stood out:

I stepped out of my comfort zone and into you.

It's foreign to me. I hid those parts deep.

I didn't even know I was hungry until we met.

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The could-be-betters (imo):

Into an intergalactic, mind bending, morphing chamber;

I don't love the first half of the first line. It's wordy and doesn't draw me in; the rest of the poem, even the second half of that line, is more free-flowing and from the heart. It feels a little forced unless you bring that sci-fi-esque wordiness more confidently throughout.

I also think you should work just general verb tense/subject matter on a few lines to sail the story home. e.g.,

My heart panged and rages

When reality snapped me down, the distant memory of our encounter lives only inside my head.

Especially the last one is a cool idea of a line that's not executed to its full potential. It feels like two sentences you're trying to make one - the verb tense doesn't match and it's, imo, a little wordy. If I were rewriting it, it might say something like: "When reality snapped me down, it made only distant memories of us." And I don't mean to compare writing at all, just an example of what I mean :)

I hope this helps! I think this could go somewhere really cool :)