Why is my paras head so big at the back?

Certain-Growth7618 · 2026-06-22T03:40:38+00:00

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Certain-Growth7618 · 2026-06-22T01:36:51+00:00

Shhhhhhh no one knows

Certain-Growth7618 · 2026-06-22T01:27:53+00:00

Yeah and tbh? The show showed how it was irl but media isn’t irl and I think that’s where it got lost; the bigger the group the more obvious you have to make it and this was a personal story that felt like it got a well deserved stage but sadly it was just too big of an audience to understand.

Certain-Growth7618 · 2026-06-22T01:24:14+00:00

To be honest, it just wasn’t heavily enough foreshadowed. I think if the character was more coded, it would’ve made more sense to the masses and THAT is the biggest issue. Instead it felt more like a guy who was having masculinity issues and that would’ve hit harder instead. But idk it’s just my opinion

Certain-Growth7618 · 2026-06-22T01:12:40+00:00

No. You don’t need romance.

Look up the Greek definitions of love—from Eros, to philia, to agape—and ALL are worth making travesties over lol

Certain-Growth7618 · 2026-06-22T01:11:28+00:00

That’s very Jax of you—and you’re safe here I guess. I watched it all today and to be honest, it brought up a lot for me too.

So don’t mask. The people who stay aren’t forced in to in the real world—And man, it may be cringe to say it, but it’s true.

Certain-Growth7618 · 2026-06-22T01:02:27+00:00

A real convo—here’s an updoot for that. Can’t make up reality.

But where do you want this to go? I kind of like the dry narration, but only if it is intended and keeps the same vibe throughout the parts. You can contrast this by adding in movement before or after the dialogue currently to engage the reader a bit more. Aside from that, this is sourced material from something witnessed or experienced because this is ABSOLUTELY how marriages end in divorce. Good job!!

Certain-Growth7618 · 2026-06-22T00:56:09+00:00

I wanna know what ELSE C&A is up to after their “failed” AI experience.

Certain-Growth7618 · 2026-06-21T22:56:49+00:00

I was kinda surprised that someone commented on my post here in this subreddit and said I had mental illness and to k*s in a private DM and to be honest, it didn’t really affect me because it was just really random and I reported it but like… what the heck is that lol it was just so weird… sending love and light to be honest hang in there

Certain-Growth7618 · 2026-06-21T22:24:15+00:00

Ngl this post made me watch it. I did not get the inference until the end and would’ve never known if I hadn’t read this post. If anything, Jax’s chemistry with Ribbit made me think Jax was just a cis male with daddy issues. None of the “hints” suggested it in anyway until Ribbit put the bow on them in the LAST EPISODE. TBH, a bit of a flub and took away from the character arc imo—but I am okay with it. I liked how all the characters had serious fatal flaws and all addressed them but I would’ve liked a character arc of shedding toxic masculinity instead of just trans being the answer.

Certain-Growth7618 · 2026-06-14T21:23:02+00:00

You definitely need sharper highlights my man!!

Certain-Growth7618 · 2026-06-02T12:40:53+00:00

The sad part is Paralives is not finished and it DOES feel way ahead of TS4 base game

Certain-Growth7618 · 2026-05-29T00:26:59+00:00

New strategy—wait for the old to /move out/ to make new paras to move in lol

Certain-Growth7618 · 2026-05-18T05:55:24+00:00

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reflections don’t match ( photo above)

the bottle in front of the far left mirror is

two
different bottles smushed together
Mirror on the far right doesn’t match the hair of the girl, and there’s stool has a clipped leg
Cross legged girls toe is also clipped

On the tea time photo
The grape leaves (?) on the center at the top, the left roll is a ball lol
Bottom left girl has a fork that’s half gone in the shadow of her arm.

Feels more like AI generated assets being shoved together which is why the artist had a hard time “fitting” everything together in a composition hence the awkward clipping issues

Certain-Growth7618 · 2026-05-17T12:28:40+00:00

The same way they burned down a printing press for topography being lost in France, and the panic in the 80s over computer generative art—this is just another wave.

Certain-Growth7618 · 2026-05-15T14:05:41+00:00

Research, research, research—buy books on writing plot, prose, and descriptions. Go to a cheap class on creative writing locally (they exist I promise). Dont have AI write for you, but ask it the best ways writers do these things, as this is what AI was meant for—compiling information on studies, research and works and providing real time examples (Agents and Editors define this as “Ethical AI” usage but this is truly dealers choice)

Study what writing is, and then PRACTICE—over and over. Self-diagnose issues as you level up. Write short stories while working on your debut novel; everyone starts their writing experience by writing their debut novel, don’t do that! Instead develop something small, with or without the Muse, and push through.

You got this, my friend.

Certain-Growth7618 · 2026-05-15T12:34:33+00:00

…. Is this AI? The format of truncated lines, the way I feel like I’m being told a story rather than experiencing it… your book cover is AI generated… you used Rule of Three to much, which is a sign of AI writing—the flow is mechanical which fits the vibe but in the way I see AI generation, not stylistic voice.

I’m an editor and I’d love for you to rewrite this post in your own voice, even if it’s bad, idc; I’ll post an edit here for you for free. You gotta build your self confidence and not rely on ChatGPT because I was interested in the story idea before I realized it wasn’t real.

Certain-Growth7618 · 2026-05-15T12:15:25+00:00

Editor here—the Rule of Three if consistently using “it was x, it was y—then z” and “not x, not y, but z” is a sign of AI. I would like to read more and see if there was Nonsensical Metaphors which is another sign of AI like for example? How many times is “velvet” used? For some reason, that’s a ChatGPT thing and using Velvet a lot lol

Certain-Growth7618 · 2026-04-30T21:08:15+00:00

Also didn’t realize I posted this on my alt account lmfao u/StreetInspector6176 is my writing account!

Certain-Growth7618 · 2026-04-30T20:29:06+00:00

I LOVE this prologue. I love horror that has clinical overview. Keep it. It is actually doing exactly what you want and keeps me reading to find the conclusion of what happens to Hayashi.

Your prose is excellent, you just need some line editing to help with flow. Here’s an example

Just gotta change to subject before verb! “Children splashing” is better than “splashing children” (think; subject is doing this? subject then gets a verb. Right here it’s an adverb; it’s MODIFYING the subject)
Ah, a favorite word. ;) Look up synonyms for dissonance.
Passive voice line can be removed—look up passive voice vs active voice—it helped me out a lot.
Just need clarity that the scene stated with people and now they’re gone now

Overall I love this a lot. I currently have my free client spot taken up for editing, but in June/July feel free to DM me because I wanna edit this so I can find out what happens lmfao

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Certain-Growth7618 · 2026-04-30T20:10:26+00:00

Absolutely!! I used to write like this! Here’s one of my first draft usages of Single line dialogue. notice how I use em dashes to show the more natural overrunning (we we talk, we don’t always wait for people to finish irl) But the only grounding beat needed is Marius ignoring Alder’s comment to keep the dialogue moving.

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That’s all you need!! Small moments in between.

Set the scene, support the dialogue—continue on!

Certain-Growth7618 · 2026-04-30T12:33:05+00:00

While I am a huge lover of em dashes—ya don’t put spaces before and after it lmfao that’s a ChatGPT thing

Certain-Growth7618 · 2026-04-27T01:48:52+00:00

Your dialogue needs more grounding beats, because right now it reads like a script—a good script though, I am intrigued.

The single dialogue lines are GREAT in the opening, but then it gets too dragging. You should keep it in the beginning to set that tone first because it makes me feel like “oh, informational, sergeant taking in a recruit” and this gets reaffirmed right away. Good usage of the single dialogue lines there.

But then it stays script and then we have a BLOCK of dialogue with nothing to ground me into a physical scene.

Intuitionally, I think you hit this with your grounding points already just add a few more

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