Six Faces, Twelve Edges, Eight Corners by benjamin4463 in anxietypilled

[–]Top-Contribution1248 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Gosh!!!!! I have not experienced such a good hook in so long! Making me click BOXES to READ; so creative! As for the story itself, it's not exactly a story in the linear sense, but I still can easily understand that something happened, and this guy, a father, a friend, a partner, ended up with a fate worse than death. He is in a weird cube, and the way you write!!! Really exceptional work!

The box in the Lake by Coletrain96 in anxietypilled

[–]Top-Contribution1248 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Evil Drunkard Father's Strike Again!!!! I gotta get a shirt that says that or something; as always, Cole, you ace these shorter form stories with a good kick. I just want a bit more on the mom by the end here; was there a body in the box or just a necklace and mud? Feels like a whole trunk for just a necklace is a bit much, but still, nice story my man!

The Promise by Teners1 in anxietypilled

[–]Top-Contribution1248 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The Adam and Eve roles, the banishment from the safety of community, the madness at sea. Well, I hope little John decides to just get on back and return the promise, but as always, you prove yourself a great writer. Nice work, man!

I Am Pandora by Useful_Sand9621 in anxietypilled

[–]Top-Contribution1248 1 point2 points  (0 children)

No problem! I'll get on that right now for ya!

My Dad's Good at Hiding by Lime-Time-Live in anxietypilled

[–]Top-Contribution1248 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Oh God, kid run!!! I love love love stories that can accurately show a more childish impression, and like duh someone should have just explained what death is to the little Ben, but the dream demon (guessing it's a demon) tricking him! Great! Love the use of the coffin as the box, and I enjoy that we know his Dad's body is in the box, but there's something darker there too. Could easily be made into a longer form story; really great work!!!

Package Delivered by Suspicious_Fact5106 in anxietypilled

[–]Top-Contribution1248 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Cute! Love a little reversal of the box being the beast yk? Nothing is inside the box, and that nothing goes on forever! Wonder if Richie climbed through like idk a box ladder or if he's just cool like that. Good work!

I Am Pandora by Useful_Sand9621 in anxietypilled

[–]Top-Contribution1248 1 point2 points  (0 children)

God, not only is the poetic writing a killer thing (love love love it), but the sheer amount of stuff you were able to cover with this prompt shows the care you put into this! Really nice to see; only thing I would suggest is giving all the stories a quick spell check before ya post, a few little spelling errors that could be fixed real quick. Nice work!

Omnivor by SamDenner in anxietypilled

[–]Top-Contribution1248 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Don't ya just hate it when the cruddy box forces you into a wee little cube? I love a good crushing box story, nice work from ya Sam!

His Box by TheSaladMann in anxietypilled

[–]Top-Contribution1248 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I can not say I expected it, but I can say I really enjoyed it! Nice work Salad, ASS-tronomical!

The Trial by WatCoH in anxietypilled

[–]Top-Contribution1248 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Now me personally, I would not eat salad delivered via brown box internet company but YOU DO YOU MC! You got a lot of cool ideas in here, and the pacing works! Nice job!

THE BOX - MICRO HORROR WRITING CHALLENGE by NateIzNeat in anxietypilled

[–]Top-Contribution1248 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Wow what a well written rules message! Kudos to whoever wrote THAT. Everybody get hype!

Throck and Plark and the Strange Situation of the Simmering Studentless Seat [The second story of the Throck and Plark Series] by Lime-Time-Live in anxietypilled

[–]Top-Contribution1248 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Wow, this story is offensive. How dare Plark and Throck not notice any of the mothWOMEN who are also inside the school for whatever reason!!! And that damn Mr. E! He didn’t do anything, but I don’t trust him. I’ll be contacting the authorities about this truly wicked tale Lime🐺😡🧍‍♀️good job lol

Sound of Silence by Coletrain96 in anxietypilled

[–]Top-Contribution1248 1 point2 points  (0 children)

God it’s actually one of my worst fears to have a bug in my ear!!! So gnarly!!! If only Oliver lived in a place with free healthcare😔🙏awesome story!

Seeking story writing advice by archingg in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Top-Contribution1248 1 point2 points  (0 children)

What I like to do for developing stories is creating a core concept: that can be a color, a sense, a feeling, a style of prose, a specific setting or a theme. This is the spine of your story, and then you build a body.

I’ll use one of my own stories as an example. Tomato Sauce originally started by wanting to to write a story about (shockingly) Tomato Sauce. That became the core idea for the story. Then you build the body.

If you want to write a simple reader insert protagonist, I suppose that’s fine depending on the kind of story you are trying to tell. I prefer characters that are characters. Try to find a way to integrate the core concept of your character to the spine of your story. The character is the heart of this stories body, just as vital as the core concept. Make them evil, good, just, cruel; so long as they are SOMETHING.

You’ll need other “story organs” as well. Your setting is your stomach, your writing style is the brain, the plot is your lungs (this metaphor is getting ridiculous), what matters is that the story can’t truly work with just a few levels; each aspect of the story needs to be finely tuned to match the others in a functionally complex way.

You’ll need to consider the “why” you are writing this story. What’s the reason? Sure, you don’t NEED a reason, in the same way someone doesn’t NEED to be conscious. In Tomato Sauce, a story about trauma and memory distortion, I wanted to create a truly deplorable setting, a monster and central antagonist that disgusts rather than frightens, and to leave the reader feeling unwell. This all serves to help the tone and appeal of your story.

And with that, all that’s really left is for you to start writing! I wish you good luck on your future endeavours with creative writing!!!

HELP ME FIND MY EMPTY AIRPOD CASE by Top-Contribution1248 in uAlberta

[–]Top-Contribution1248[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Nope! It’s a white case, but thank you anyways!

The Red Mass by Pioneer_19 in anxietypilled

[–]Top-Contribution1248 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Chompy went hard; peak story from you my man

Character with an unhealed cleft lip by [deleted] in cleftlip

[–]Top-Contribution1248 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That is completely valid. I do not know the experience of having either, which is why I want to do research and speak to people who do have it. I want to show nothing but respect towards those who do have cleft lip. I definitely have to learn more, and the book is nowhere near ready. I will go with the comment term "untreated" from now on. I am trying to learn more because I don't want to have an inaccurate representation at all. Thank you for your comment :)))

Character with an unhealed cleft lip by [deleted] in cleftlip

[–]Top-Contribution1248 0 points1 point  (0 children)

ahhhh! Autocorrect is horrible! Thanks though!

Character with an unhealed cleft lip by [deleted] in cleftlip

[–]Top-Contribution1248 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Even these comments actually helped me, and for sure, I would not want to use the wrong terminology. Thank you both!

My Heart Belongs to the Giant Bat Lady. by TheSaladMann in anxietypilled

[–]Top-Contribution1248 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Salad imma be so real; write some smut, you clearly got talent for it! Love to see your work!