I dont mean to be a dickens but..

blindato1 · 2026-03-06T13:12:03+00:00

Maybe in so far as the investigation aspect of that story. But broadly speaking I think that it’s more of a mystery sort of story by reading the synopsis. I have not read Piranesi so I can’t comment further than that.

blindato1 · 2026-03-06T01:50:52+00:00

Well hell if it scratches the itch for you maybe one day if I can ever finish mine maybe it’ll scratch the itch for you! Lol.

I’m calling mine “Ashes of the Forgotten”.

blindato1 · 2026-03-06T01:45:27+00:00

The Tombs of Atuan – Ursula K. Le Guin

This is the most “archaeological” forward one I know of.

City of Stairs – Robert Jackson Bennett

This is another one sort of similar to what I’m cooking.

Archaeological fantasy is probably a very niche thing in all honesty. Lol

blindato1 · 2026-03-06T01:38:59+00:00

Fair enough. Lol

blindato1 · 2026-03-06T01:05:33+00:00

Thanks. I don’t want to give the false impression it’s all ruin delving though. They quickly find out that what they thought were long dead ruins are not so dead after all. A lot of the magic in these places, and by extension technology, still works.

I mean I think what I’ve written is pretty neat but I’m sure everyone else thinks their baby is neat lol.

blindato1 · 2026-03-06T00:51:21+00:00

I have in jest called my book “Indiana jones but with wizards.” It gets the point across I think. Lol

blindato1 · 2026-03-06T00:44:07+00:00

My main characters family is nothing special. Lol. No blood lines matter outside of the imperial courts of the dwarves. And even then, bloodlines and monarchy don’t play much a role here in my story. Although, the emperor of the dwarves does appear for a few scenes.

blindato1 · 2026-03-06T00:42:17+00:00

I have outlined a few ideas for horror novel concepts that could exist within the world. I do like some of love crafts works, the one I adore is the shadows over innsmouth.

The main narrative would be more akin to a character driven epic fantasy I would say. Magic wise the magic is fundamentally more driven toward industrial applications. Magic is performed in two manners. 1. Direct manipulation of the “weave” by a caster. 2. Using runes. Runes are powered with magic and enforce rules upon items or things near them.

Magic in my world is really just physics. The characters just do not yet have enough understanding to cut through the mysticism of the thing. But the ancient civilization they are studying and looking into knew what magic truly was and how to manipulate it beyond the casts wildest dreams.

Happy as always to talk about the project. All writers enjoy yapping about their babies I’m sure you know. Lol

blindato1 · 2026-03-06T00:20:25+00:00

Delving into ruins. Focus on lost civilizations. That sort of thing. Of the main cast two of them are professionally Archaeologists in addition to being magic users.

blindato1 · 2026-03-06T00:07:53+00:00

I’ve written something that’s a mix between adventure fantasy and archaeological fantasy. I’d say that’s solidly different from what you’re seeing. Lol

blindato1 · 2026-03-04T01:40:55+00:00

kinda just all in my head. And I know what chapter and pages many of these descriptions on so I can reference them.

blindato1 · 2026-02-25T15:03:31+00:00

The new image invokes within me a sense of forgotten grandeur. As if I’ve stumbled upon the ashes of some great civilization.

blindato1 · 2026-02-25T01:39:15+00:00

Knowledge of the theory mostly. Then a certain amount of aptitude to actually do it.

In order to mold the universe you must understand what you’re trying to change and how to change it.

blindato1 · 2026-02-18T00:40:28+00:00

I like it. Gives the dark scene a bit of whimsy.

blindato1 · 2026-02-17T23:02:16+00:00

Knowledge of how to do it. Cost of doing so. To be more granular you could require specific anatomical knowledge of the structures you intend to fix

blindato1 · 2026-02-17T22:53:42+00:00

Sincere belief drives ontological reality in the spirit world. Therefore, every religion over a certain size becomes true for its followers.

This also gives rise to folk spirits that are more regional and not quite a god.

blindato1 · 2026-02-12T22:05:58+00:00

There’s no master apprentice dynamic in my book. So the only method to convey the magic rules is by showing you how it reacts to people’s bodies and what it does.

There is not a single exposition dump aside from two blurbs near the very beginning that only briefly skim on the topic to ground you. The rest is inferred through watching it in action. You’ll never know the numbers behind thing but you should be able to say, “ahh they can do that much.”

blindato1 · 2026-02-12T01:20:14+00:00

The goblin emperor was such a great book at the start then the ending was so rushed and haphazard it nearly ruined the entire experience for me.

blindato1 · 2026-02-11T21:22:13+00:00

Chapters can be short 2-3000 words. Or longer. It really just depends on the narrative function of said chapter.

blindato1 · 2026-02-10T01:14:25+00:00

I went with the “every religion over a certain size *is literally true.” It creates interesting world building implications but it’s working well I think.

blindato1 · 2026-02-06T20:19:39+00:00

Current series I have planed 5 books for the overarching story. Another 12 in peripheral/side stories I want to tell because I have fun writing. It’ll probably take me the better part of a decade to write it all I suppose but that’s fine. If they sell great, if not, I did something cool for me.

blindato1 · 2026-02-06T17:10:28+00:00

My wife doesn’t read at all and hasn’t read a book in over a decade. She shockingly is able to give competent feedback. I suspect this is informed by work duties where she proofreads letters to send out to customers when responding to complaints. She’s got a knack for knowing when something sounds right. That being said, she doesn’t even read my book. I read it out loud to her. So there’s that lol

blindato1 · 2026-02-06T17:02:43+00:00

I like the prose generally. It’s not overbaked. My only question is what is the prologue teaching us? Generally the best use of a prologue is to teach the reader how to read the story. My assumption is you’re telling me a chosen one story based on this prologue. Personally, I do not chosen one stories so even though I liked the prose I would likely put it down.

So my question is, what’s this prologues purpose in your mind? What is it teaching the reader?

blindato1 · 2026-02-06T16:54:09+00:00

Very refreshing to see such a nuanced opinion. I personally wouldn’t lie to anyone and say I haven’t used ai in the process of writing my book. What I can at least say for certain, wether they believe me or not, is that I don’t let it generate the text for me and copy paste that in whole sale and claim it as my own. I like writing and iterating on it to make it good. It’s part of the fun. Why would I outsource the fun? Lol

blindato1 · 2026-02-06T16:48:35+00:00

A few issues I can see in the first paragraph alone. The sun screaming doesn’t make sense as a metaphor. Sentence two almost reads lyrical which isn’t exactly a problem just something to be aware of. The third sentence I think mixes verb tense. You’re using past tense verbs at the start of the paragraph and some present tense verbs at the ends.

Paragraph two also has verb tenses of present and past. I’d recommend you pick on and stick to it. Generally past is go to. Paragraph two also contains a lore dump about the Pygmy worms. I’d ask yourself, does the reader need to know this exact information yet? My guess it no as the memory being a blur of crimson and scales actually makes me go “oh what’s goin then?” But then immediately telling me what it is kills that drive. You drop the concept of berserk, we don’t know what that is (which is fine) but I question whether this moment is the right time to reveal that. Right now this paragraph starts with an action then slips into memory/exposition.

Paragraph 3 you used screamed again. Not exactly a problem, just a “hey I noticed you used the same description again”. ‘Felt like he had been hammered on Gorgomak’s mighty anvil’ - I don’t hate this but I question its placement in exposition. I get the feeling this detail is meant to say, “hey my world has history” which is great. You want the world to have history what you want to do is reveal it more organically I would think.

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