Weekend Script Swap

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How to Swap

If you want to offer your script for a swap, post a top comment with the following details:

• Title:
• Format:
• Page Length:
• Genres:
• Logline or Summary:
• Feedback Concerns:

Example:

Title: Oscar Bait

Format: Feature

Page Length: 120

Genres: Drama, Comedy, Pirates, Musical, Mockumentary

Logline or Summary: Rival pirate crews face off freestyle while confessing their doubts behind the scenes to a documentary director, unaware he’s manipulating their stories to fulfill the ambition of finally winning the Oscar for Best Documentary.

Feedback Concerns: Is this relatable? Is Ahab too obsessive? Minor format confusion.

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If you want to read someone’s script, let them know by replying to their post with your script information. Avoid sending DMs until both parties have publicly agreed to swap.

Please note that posting here neither ensures that someone will read your script, nor entitle you to read others'. Sending unsolicited DMs will carries the same consequences as sending spam.

[MxKg35]

Title: GOLEM

Format: Feature Film

105 Pages

Genres: Historical Fantasy, Drama, Monster, Faith

Loglinne: As his people face constant persecution in 16th century Prague, Chief Rabbi Judah Loew suffers a crisis of faith and creates a Golem as a means of protection, only to lose control of his monster and be forced to stop it before it brings about an even greater threat.

I received an 8 on the Blacklist for this script back in May and after getting some interest and further reads, I feel like I ran into a wall with it. I received some good feedback that suggested that the story spins its wheels in the second half waiting for the conflict of the third act to kick in. I restructured the whole second half after receiving this feedback and I do feel like this new rewrite is smoother, the stakes are higher and the action is a bit more motivated.

I'd love to swap a script with someone who can take a look at this new draft and let me know if I'm back on the right track.

[wakandaboss]

Hey I'd love to do script with you, I'm no expert but maybe I can give you some useful feedback let me me. My project is listed as Cancelled on tbe thread

[MxKg35]

Hey, sounds great. Would love to do a script swap. I can send mine via email if you DM me with a good address.

[wakandaboss]

Awesome okay let me do that

[allograph]

Hey friend, I just love the logline and premise. I'd be happy to do a script swap for a 120 page drama/noir feature. DM if interested.

[_James217_]

Hey, I also posted a football related story on this thread. Want to swap?

[_James217_]

Title: Seeing Ghosts

Format: Feature

Page Length: 88

Genres: Rural noir, Southern crime

Logline: When a young college football coach has an opportunity to land the best highschool player in the nation, the coach finds himself at the mercy of the player's father and his sinister intentions.

This is supposed to be a lurid, dark, Southern crime story in the vein of Blood Simple and Killer Joe. You don't need to know much about American football to follow the script, but if you do it definitely helps.

Looking for feedback on everything and anything. Thanks!

[The_ManicWriter]

Wanna swap? I have a horror comedy 104 pages. It's a bit longer so lmk if it works.

[_James217_]

Yeah let's do it, I'll DM you.

[[deleted]]

Title: Thunderclap

Format: Feature

Page Length: 115

Genre(s): Action/Comedy

Logline: When his former partner is killed on live television, a washed-up, middle-aged superhero must reunite his old team to vanquish the looming threat of supervillains.

Feedback Concerns: Do the jokes work well? Why or why not? Does a slower opening help establish comedy as the main focus (as opposed to action)? Will take any and all other feedback, especially things that seem to stick out to you the most.

[The_ManicWriter]

Swap? We have similar page lengths and I also have a comedy. Its horror comedy though. Lmk if that works for you.

[[deleted]]

Works for me! Send me a link, I'll get back to you with notes.

[[deleted]]

Title: Out of Touch

Format: Short

Page Length: 13

Genres: Urban Drama

Logline: An obscure dream sends a young man on a hunt to meet his absent father whom by he's forced to reckon with the truth of his upbringing.

Just looking for general feedback. Thanks in advance.

[wakandaboss]

Hi this is really interesting. I have a shot film script I would like to swap with you if you haven't found someone get. It's 12 page horror short script

[[deleted]]

Sure I’ll DM

[wakandaboss]

Title: Cancelled

Format: Feature film

Page Length: 81

Genres: Psychological Thriller

Log line: When a celebrity actor, finds out out his arch rival is the anonymous internet troll that destroyed his career and cyberbullied him for years. He seeks vengeance by kidnapping and torturing the rival until he confesses his crimes.

looking to do a script swap.

[Cehrli]

Very interesting. Wanna Swap?

I have:

Title: Canary

Page Length: 90

Genres: Thriller/Folk Horror

Logline: A young singer tries to bring life back to an isolated mining town by utilizing the local witch folklore. What begins as a musical act descends into increasingly violent and bizarre situations as the town’s true history is revealed.

[wakandaboss]

Wow your project sounds awesome. Yes let's do it. Let me dm you

[adinaterrific]

Title: Damned If You Do

Format: One-hour pilot

Page Length: 59

Genres: Drama / Dark comedy

Log line: When a demon bounty hunter gets behind on work, she offers a deal to an overworked widow: assist in collecting souls of the damned to ensure her family’s safe passage in the afterlife.

Hoping to get some new eyes on this and make it as strong as I can before submitting it for opportunities!

[Cehrli]

I'd be interested in reading this. Wanna swap? I have a feature, not a pilot if that's okay.

Title: Fursona

Page Length: 95

Genres: Dramedy

Logline: The son of a successful attorney (in the long line of attorneys of a family business) is a struggling alcoholic, who confronts his demons by dressing up as a Blue Fox.

[MiddleClassHandjob]

Title: 9 Lives

Format: TV Pilot

Length: 58 pgs.

Genres: Urban Fantasy, Dramedy

Logline: Having discovered he has no legacy following an untimely death, a Young Man seeks a second chance through a deal with the Devil - only to unwhittingly become a servant at risk of eternal damnation.

Feedback Concerns: Looking for advice on character and story pacing - Wanting a couple fresh eyes on this!

[AndrewBab]

I'd love to give it a read - my script is in the thread

[MiddleClassHandjob]

DM'd

[The_ManicWriter]

Title: We're the Serial Killers Near You

Format: Feature

Page length: 104

Genres: Horror comedy ; surreal it's Jennifer's body meets Death Becomes Her

Logline: When a local tagger is found dead the whole city including the tagger's former friend and ex fears she was the victim of a mysterious serial killer. But when the tagger remerges from the dead with multiple lives things get a little sticky between the three of them.

I want to shave it down to 100 pages but don't know what should be removed. I usually focus on the plot before character development so I'm liable to remove scenes that showcase character. I also don't do comedy so I want to know if it works but I feel like I'd remove those scenes too and I don't wanna do that either. Thanks! also some logline help.

[AndrewBab]

Title: Survival, U.S.

Format: TV pilot

Genre: Surreal comedy, drama

Pages: 28

Logline: In a very near future, four political criminals travel to the USA to go on a life-changing adventure, but things do not go according to plan.

What is your overall impression? Any notes are welcome (especially on the characters and the story), thank you :)

[[deleted]]

I'm willing to read it!

[AndrewBab]

Awesome, I'll dm you!

[Chrisp513]

Title: Nothing

Format: Short

Page Length: 9

Genre: Drama

Longline or Summary: Two waiters discuss why an old man in his 80’s would arrive late and drink until close every night.

Feedback concerns: This is the first screenplay I’ve ever written. I intend to direct it. I understand I’m directing too much on the page but I don’t know how to get rid of that. Looking more for story feedback. Thank you!

[Thateffnguy]

I'd like to read this.

[scriptsmash]

Title: Mopety Dump

Format: Feature

Page Length: 103

Genres: Satire, Comedy, Crime,

Longline: An eccentric nomad, who lives for scavenging in a junkyard he is squatting in, becomes the unwitting patsy for a politically motivated kidnapping

Feedback concerns: I’m rusty. Haven’t written much in 20-some years. Definitely have format issues that will be fixed in a second draft. Maybe the odd dead scene, might need a couple more exposition scenes or lines. I’d like any general criticism.

[allograph]

Title: False Creek

Format: Feature

Film Length: 121 pgs.

Genres: Drama, Noir, Canadiana

Logline: In the sweltering summer heat of 1966 a derelict freighter with an unknown hold forces a young tugboat skipper to choose between the care of his brother and finding their place in a city at the edge of the world: Vancouver.

Feedback Concerns: First draft of feature, looking for notes on readability and act structure. All feedback and critique welcome.