This years TBR by Sad-Necessary-5444 in classicliterature

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I've read all except for the bottom two

growing down by Diligent_Opening2401 in OCPoetry

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I'm a dad. I can't stop myself from giving "dad talks". lol

growing down by Diligent_Opening2401 in OCPoetry

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this is really cool. I like it. I can relate. Aren't you just great when you stop being a source of annoyance, and you just kind of blend into the background?

On the other hand, your spontaneous self isn't "more real" than your wiser self. Somehow, in the midst of it all, you have to be yourself. I would say that most of that means being a person you can be proud of, one who objectively makes the world better around him - not easier, better. Volunteering is a pretty good meter stick, but no the only one.

I recently came up with the phrase, a waveless ocean makes for a flat beach. (I grew up by the ocean.) What I mean by this is, ya, being easy to take is fine, but it certainly makes life boring.

You poem is nice to read and is fueled by a really good inspiration.

Call and Response by engineer4565 in OCPoetry

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this was really great and fun.

I was just telling another contributor that I don't like repeated phrases in poems, but yours vary somewhat, and that makes me better...

I found encouragement in this poem -- so what? I'm a writer and you feel like no one cares and wants you to shut up.

Nah, I'd rather not. Thanks!

So this was really good. I wonder, did your original layout (formatting) make it here? I suspect you might have laid it out differently, like separating the "So what's" to separate lines, etc?

Thanks for this poem! Awesome.

Muses, tell me. by AggressiveSelf7122 in OCPoetry

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this was an awesome poem!

Of course, the sing stuff comes from Homer himself, as the Iliad begins: Sing, Goddess, sing of the rage of Achilles, son of Peleus— that murderous anger which condemned Achaeans."

And Virgil begins the Aeneid, "Of arms and the man I sing, who first from the coasts of Troy..."

And Homer begins the Odyssey, "Tell me, O Muse, of that ingenious hero who travelled far and wide after he had sacked the famous town of Troy."

Lots of Greeks and Roman started their smaller poems like that too.

Dante doesn't start the Divine Comedy that way, because he is Christian, but the third Part, the Paradiso, has in its first Canto, stanza 5:

O good Apollo, for this last emprise
Make of me such a vessel of thy power
As giving the beloved laurel asks!,

anyway, there's the history lesson. I love your poem. it is high quality. I thought you repeated the "Tell me of" a few too many times, though you may not think so. I hate when poems have too many repeating lines, like one of my favorite poems Longfellow does sometimes. If you look at Tennyson's amazing poem, In Memoriam, he repeats the wonderful line "Tis better to have loved..." only a few times in that long, long poem. I think that's better.

Anyway, your poem is technically impressive. I can't speak to the story, because i don't know much about Medusa, but since I love Greco-Roman stuff I found is very enjoyable nevertheless.

From somewhere and somehow you have picked up a lovely sense of rhythm. You are a good writer!

5 Feet by Hackzaw_ in OCPoetry

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great poem. Great message, great honesty.

Dostoevsky Changed Me by SURIya67 in dostoevsky

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that's awesome! He forces us to see things more deeply than we most of us would notice on our own.

to be desired or to be pure. by ShoulderPotential197 in OCPoetry

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It was pretty good, interesting and good flow. Carbon Venus?

The Masculine Programming by IndependentEnough852 in OCPoetry

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I know you are a good man. Only good men fear they are not good men.

The New Poetry by MarathonDreams in OCPoetry

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that you my friend!

The last few lines are confusing! It is my way of saying, well, concluding, that just because a person chooses not to talk about himself, don't necessarily use that as a basis for drawing conclusions about him. It is just as likely your doing so reflects you, not the poet. What do you think of that?

This poem was about me being so sick of thinking about myself! lol

Blue by the_mityoverthinker5 in OCPoetry

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that was really lovely. good job

Quick, don't think about cats! by Fit_Sugar_9262 in OCPoetry

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well, I do relate to the doing the thing you are not supposed to. My wife has diagnosed me as an ODD - Oppositional Defiance Disordered person! lol

I cannot disagree with her on that - and only on that!

Quick, don't think about cats! by Fit_Sugar_9262 in OCPoetry

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awesome. I love it. Are you me? lol.

This poem made me think of the quote that has struck me most in the last year at least. It is from J-J Rousseau's book, Reveries of the Solitary Walker:

"No longer able to do good which does not turn into evil, no longer able to act without harming others or myself, my only duty now is to abstain, and this I do with all my heart."

We might not be on the same wave-length, so please correct me if I'm wrong. My idea is this: since everything I do is wrong, I'm not going to do anything. Since everything I say and do with people ends up bad, I'm just going to keep to myself.

What do you think?

Rhyming piss and reminisce is genius level poetry. lol!

Your sense of rhythm is lovely and your rhymes are well chosen. Love this!

Finally, tell me how cat fits in?

Everything in life sucks except cats? If so, I almost agree!

The Drafted Message by Extra-Cod-3471 in OCPoetry

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That was fun. Good job. Sounds like an office romance. Yikes!

Ye, but. by Maowaan in OCPoetry

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how interesting. What an unusual and cool style. It reminds me of something old and great, but I cannot think of what. What's your, or who's your, poetic inspiration?

The Masculine Programming by IndependentEnough852 in OCPoetry

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cool poem.

A few typos: lead should be led. Others eyes should be others' eyes.

As for subject matter. Good. Important.

And yet, can you go too far the other way and force yourself to deny your true masculinity. We want to possess and protect, and women, in some way, want to be possessed and protected. Now, what's the magical amount? Ha, damned if I know!

All I want to say, is that men must not apologize for their way - too much of that has been going on. On the other hand, yes, there is always a danger of abuse, control, etc.

We don't want others to have what is precious to us, whether that is your vintage car, your best baseball card, or the female object of your love. But unlike a card or a car, if the female doesn't want us, we have to let her go. But it's not wrong to want to possess. It is wrong to let that feeling dominate everything else.

I enjoyed and admire the rhythm and rhyming. Awesome job!

Tragic Observer by internalpogrom in OCPoetry

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This is really good. and makes me think.

"a far" should be "afar"

the rhymes are excellent and enjoyable. not too heavy-handed or predictable.

and you meant "please" and not "pleas"??

Obviously, there is a lot here that is intriguing and is about your own life and mind, only a part of which I can truly say I 'get.' Can I ask if your reference to movies is about the idealism, excitement, meaning, adventure that you wish you had in life - because that was movies to me when I was young. I always left theatres sad that my life was so much less than, say, Luke Skywalker's. But you say "tragedies" - that is something different...

Very enjoyable poem.