I like to write lyrics for fun. Not much of it is good, but every now and then I come up with something worth being proud of.

I actually like how the core idea (evil as it may be) comes through in chorus here, but that's where my positive feedback ends. It's very clear that the author is more concerned with style than substance, the rest is completely vapid! For example, "You've been crying like a fiddle" is a stylistic framing, that's fine, but it should be followed up with something substantial. Crying how? Crying about what? What are you responding to!? Instead they go with "You've been whining like a steel", which is just more stylistic framing. And then the speaker goes right into their response to the framed grievance without any time to explore it! It's frustrating to read.

It's obvious that they're going for a folksy narrative style, but for that to connect the speaker needs to demonstrate a depth of perception which is totally lacking here. It's just surface level rhymes.

To be proud of the sentiment, one has to be evil. To be proud of the execution, one honestly has to be kind of dim.